[freehaven-cvs] patches

[arma@seul.org (Roger Dingledine)]

Update of /home/freehaven/cvsroot/doc/fc04
In directory moria.mit.edu:/home2/arma/work/freehaven/doc/fc04

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	minion-systems.tex 
Log Message:
patches
now just needs a last sentence ;)


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RCS file: /home/freehaven/cvsroot/doc/fc04/minion-systems.tex,v
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diff -u -d -r1.9 -r1.10
--- minion-systems.tex	9 Sep 2003 23:28:10 -0000	1.9
+++ minion-systems.tex	9 Sep 2003 23:57:34 -0000	1.10
@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@
 
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-\section{Introduction: Anonymity and Business}
+\section{Introduction: Anonymity and Digital Commerce}
 
 In this paper, we argue that strongly anonymous (traffic analysis
 resistant) communications are valuable to the business and finance
@@ -194,7 +194,7 @@
 automated server directory with key rotation.
 
 \section{Future work}
-Before Mixminion is ready for broad-scale user adoption more
+Before Mixminion is ready for broad-scale user adoption, more
 work remains, both in research and in implementation.  The largest
 areas ahead are, broadly:
 \begin{itemize}
@@ -233,8 +233,6 @@
   still protecting the company's activities from outside observers.
 \end{itemize} 
 
-[XXX Roger: what did you mean by 'an emphasis on systemsy stuff?' -NM]
-
 Beyond software development and research, much exploration remains
 within the broader financial cryptography community to discover
 appropriate applications and economic models for anonymous
@@ -244,20 +242,19 @@
 these users.
 
 There is reason for hope.  The incentives structure of anonymity
-systems strongly contraindicate in-house measures against traffic
+systems strongly argue against in-house measures to block traffic
 analysis: an organization using a ``private'' anonymity system cannot
 hide its traffic among traffic from other organizations.  Thus,
 finance organizations that need to resist traffic analysis have an
-incentive to seek common solutions that meet not only their own needs,
+incentive to seek common solutions that not only meet their own needs,
 but that will attract as many users as possible.  The more users an
 anonymity system has, the more anonymity it provides
 them.\cite{econymics} The same reasoning gives non-business users an
 incentive to construct their systems to meet the needs of business and
 financial communities.
 
-[XXX We should close with a nice upbeat statement to the effect ``We
-  hope that people will spend lots of money on this problem, and
-  decide to use some of it funding us.'' -NM]
+We hope that people will spend lots of money on this problem, and decide
+to use some of it funding us.
 
 \bibliographystyle{plain}
 \bibliography{minion-systems}

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