[freehaven-cvs] minor tweaks

[arma@seul.org (Roger Dingledine)]

Update of /home/freehaven/cvsroot/doc/fc04
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	minion-systems.tex 
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Index: minion-systems.tex
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RCS file: /home/freehaven/cvsroot/doc/fc04/minion-systems.tex,v
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--- minion-systems.tex	10 Sep 2003 16:43:41 -0000	1.13
+++ minion-systems.tex	10 Sep 2003 17:34:18 -0000	1.14
@@ -25,7 +25,7 @@
 performing traffic analysis to reveal the {\it presence} of such
 communication.
 
-Mixminion is an open-source, deployed system under active development.
+Mixminion is an open source, deployed system under active development.
 It resists known forms of traffic analysis, allowing parties to
 communicate without revealing their identities.
 \end{abstract}
@@ -42,7 +42,7 @@
 community, and we present Mixminion, an anonymous communication system
 currently in active development.
 
-As early as the first business-related telegrams were received by an
+As early as when the first business-related telegrams were received by an
 untrusted telegraph operator, businesses have recognized the
 importance of encrypting messages on communications networks.  Less
 well-recognized, however, is the importance of protecting business
@@ -83,11 +83,11 @@
 corporate website administrators routinely survey logs to learn which
 competitors and customers have viewed which parts of their websites,
 and how often.  The more sophisticated attacks are almost certainly
-within capabilities of a nation able and inclined to use signals
+within the capabilities of a nation able and inclined to use signals
 intelligence resources for economic goals, as the US has (probably)
-done the NSA-backed ECHELON system.  Finally, in between the threat of
+done with the NSA-backed ECHELON system.  Finally, in between the threat of
 unsophisticated analysis and the threat of mid-sized foreign
-governments, lies the potentially more compelling risk of espionage
+governments, is the potentially more compelling threat of espionage
 from competing companies.  The risk of a competitor bribing an
 employee at a nearby telecom, or sneaking eavesdropping equipment into
 a colocation facility, is not well explored in the public literature.
@@ -98,7 +98,7 @@
 schemes provide very little of the privacy that they promise.
 
 In this short paper, we discuss several existing systems and designs
-to defeat traffic analysis.  We focus on Mixminion, an open-source
+to defeat traffic analysis.  We focus on Mixminion, an open source
 application with a deployed research network under active development.
 
 \subsection{Background}

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