[tor-commits] [torbutton/master] Bug 27214: Improve the onboarding text

[gk@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx]

commit 4028a0c197e516a72125973355505b499a17cebc
Author: Kathy Brade <brade@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
Date:   Tue Aug 28 14:32:07 2018 -0400

    Bug 27214: Improve the onboarding text
---
 src/chrome/locale/en/browserOnboarding.properties | 20 ++++++++++----------
 1 file changed, 10 insertions(+), 10 deletions(-)

diff --git a/src/chrome/locale/en/browserOnboarding.properties b/src/chrome/locale/en/browserOnboarding.properties
index 49085fba..6c2fb0c8 100644
--- a/src/chrome/locale/en/browserOnboarding.properties
+++ b/src/chrome/locale/en/browserOnboarding.properties
@@ -4,37 +4,37 @@
 
 onboarding.tour-tor-welcome=Welcome
 onboarding.tour-tor-welcome.title=Youâ??re ready.
-onboarding.tour-tor-welcome.description=Tor Browser offers the highest standard of privacy and security while browsing the web. You are now protected against tracking, surveillance and censorship. Learn how we are doing it by following this quick onboarding.
+onboarding.tour-tor-welcome.description=Tor Browser offers the highest standard of privacy and security while browsing the web. Youâ??re now protected against tracking, surveillance, and censorship. This quick onboarding will show you how.
 onboarding.tour-tor-welcome.button=Start Now
 
 onboarding.tour-tor-privacy=Privacy
 onboarding.tour-tor-privacy.title=Snub trackers and snoopers.
-onboarding.tour-tor-privacy.description=Tor Browser will isolate all traffic for each domain you visit. That means trackers and advertisers canâ??t follow you. And any information storage such as isolated cookies or browser history is deleted after your session. We make all these modifications to ensure your privacy and security protections in the browser. Click â??Tor Networkâ?? to learn how we protect you on the network level.
+onboarding.tour-tor-privacy.description=Tor Browser isolates cookies and deletes your browser history after your session. These modifications ensure your privacy and security are protected in the browser. Click â??Tor Networkâ?? to learn how we protect you on the network level.
 onboarding.tour-tor-privacy.button=Go to Tor Network
 
 onboarding.tour-tor-network=Tor Network
 onboarding.tour-tor-network.title=Travel a decentralized network.
-onboarding.tour-tor-network.description=Tor Browser will connect you to the Tor Network. Our network protects you more than a VPN because it is not centralized. Tor is a network of servers, we call them relays, run by thousands of volunteers all around the world. This way, thereâ??s no one point of failure and no centralized entity you need to trust in order to enjoy the internet. For each domain you open we create a circuit for you, click on â??Circuit Displayâ?? to learn how they work.
+onboarding.tour-tor-network.description=Tor Browser connects you to the Tor network run by thousands of volunteers around the world. Unlike a VPN, thereâ??s no one point of failure or centralized entity you need to trust in order to enjoy the internet privately.
 onboarding.tour-tor-network.button=Go to Circuit Display
 
 onboarding.tour-tor-circuit-display=Circuit Display
 onboarding.tour-tor-circuit-display.title=See your path.
-onboarding.tour-tor-circuit-display.description=For each domain you visit your traffic is relayed and encrypted in a circuit across three relays around the world. This way no website knows where you are connecting from, because they will only see the connection coming from the last relay. If you would like a new circuit you can just request one by clicking â??New Circuit for this Siteâ?? on our Circuit Display. Click below to see how it works.
-onboarding.tour-tor-circuit-display.button=Explore
+onboarding.tour-tor-circuit-display.description=For each domain you visit, your traffic is relayed and encrypted in a circuit across three Tor relays around the world. No website knows where you are connecting from. You can request a new circuit by clicking â??New Circuit for this Siteâ?? on our Circuit Display.
+onboarding.tour-tor-circuit-display.button=See My Path
 
 onboarding.tour-tor-security=Security
 onboarding.tour-tor-security.title=Choose your experience.
-onboarding.tour-tor-security.description=Your privacy will always be taken care of by Tor Browser and the Tor network by default. Besides that we also provide you with different settings for when you would like to bump up your browser security while accessing sites. Our Security Settings will allow you to block things that could be used by bad agents to attack your computer. Click below to see the different options and what they do.
+onboarding.tour-tor-security.description=We also provide you with additional settings for bumping up your browser security. Our Security Settings allow you to block elements that could be used to attack your computer. Click below to see what the different options do.
 onboarding.tour-tor-security.button=Review Settings
 
 onboarding.tour-tor-expect-differences=Experience Tips
-onboarding.tour-tor-expect-differences.title=Experience Tips
-onboarding.tour-tor-expect-differences.description=With all the security and privacy features provided by the Tor Browser and the Tor Network, your experience while browsing the internet will be a little bit different. You will notice things will run a bit slower since your connection is going through three relays around the world. Sometimes sites will ask you to prove you are a human not a robot and depending on your security options, some things might not work or load. Our goal is to always provide the best experience for our users while not lowering the bar on how to provide real privacy to our users.
+onboarding.tour-tor-expect-differences.title=Expect some differences.
+onboarding.tour-tor-expect-differences.description=With all the security and privacy features provided by Tor, your experience while browsing the internet may be a little different. Things may be a bit slower, and depending on your security level, some elements may not work or load. You may also be asked to prove you are a human and not a robot.
 onboarding.tour-tor-expect-differences.button=See FAQs
 
 onboarding.tour-tor-onion-services=Onion Services
-onboarding.tour-tor-onion-services.title=Onion Services
-onboarding.tour-tor-onion-services.description=Finally we would like to introduce you to Onion services. For ultimate privacy and security, sites ending in .onion are configured using the Tor network. Onion services provide extra protections to publishers and visitors, including added safeguards against censorship. The same way our Browser allows you to browse the web anonymously our onion services allow people to provide content and services anonymously. You will notice a little onion icon in the URL bar when accessing these services. Click below to see the NYTimes onion services and how they work.
+onboarding.tour-tor-onion-services.title=Be extra protected.
+onboarding.tour-tor-onion-services.description=Onion services are sites that end with a .onion that provide extra protections to publishers and visitors, including added safeguards against censorship. Onion services allow anyone to provide content and services anonymously. Click below to visit the DuckDuckGo onion site.
 onboarding.tour-tor-onion-services.button=Visit an Onion
 
 # Circuit Display onboarding.

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