[or-cvs] r12124: Revise index and reintroduce some old sentences I liked. (website/trunk/en)

[nickm@xxxxxxxx]

Author: nickm
Date: 2007-10-22 21:20:10 -0400 (Mon, 22 Oct 2007)
New Revision: 12124

Modified:
   website/trunk/en/index.wml
Log:
Revise index and reintroduce some old sentences I liked.

Modified: website/trunk/en/index.wml
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--- website/trunk/en/index.wml	2007-10-23 01:15:44 UTC (rev 12123)
+++ website/trunk/en/index.wml	2007-10-23 01:20:10 UTC (rev 12124)
@@ -24,25 +24,28 @@
 <h2>Tor: anonymity online</h2>
 <hr />
 
-<p>
-Tor aims to defend against <a href="<page overview>">traffic analysis</a>,
-a form of network surveillance that threatens personal anonymity and
-privacy, confidential business activities and relationships, and state
-security.
+<p>Tor is a software project that helps you defend against <a
+href="<page overview>">traffic analysis</a>, a form of network
+surveillance that threatens personal freedom and privacy, confidential
+business activities and relationships, and state security.  Tor
+protects you by encrypting your communications and bouncing them
+around a distributed network of servers.  Tor works with many of your
+existing applications, including web browsers, instant messaging
+clients, remote login, and other applications based on the Internet's
+TCP protocol.
 </p>
 
-<p>
-Hundreds of thousands of people around the world use Tor for a <a
+<p> Hundreds of thousands of people around the world use Tor for a <a
 href="<page whousestor>">wide variety of reasons</a>: journalists and
-bloggers, human rights workers,
-law enforcement officers, soldiers, corporations, citizens of repressive
-regimes, and just ordinary citizens. We have a full page devoted
-to explaining exactly <a href="<page overview>">what Tor does, why this
-diversity of users is important, and how Tor works</a>.
+bloggers, human rights workers, law enforcement officers, soldiers,
+corporations, citizens of repressive regimes, and just ordinary
+citizens.  See the <a href="<page overview>">overview page</a> for a
+more detailed explanation of what Tor does, why this diversity of
+users is important, and how Tor works</a>.
 </p>
 
 <p>
-There are three pieces of fine print you need to know about.
+(There are three pieces of fine print you need to know about.
 First, Tor does not protect you if you do not use it correctly.
 Read <a href="<page download>#Warnings">our list of warnings</a> and
 make sure to follow the
@@ -54,17 +57,18 @@
 potential attacks that could compromise Tor's ability to protect you</a>.
 Third, no anonymity system is perfect these days, and Tor is no exception:
 you should not rely solely on the current Tor network if you really need
-strong anonymity.
+strong anonymity.)
 </p>
 
+
 <p>
 Tor works by bouncing your traffic around a set of relays run by
 volunteers all around the world. Tor's security improves as its user
 base grows and as more people volunteer to
-<a href="<page docs/tor-doc-relay>">run a relay</a>. It isn't
+<a href="<page docs/tor-doc-relay>">run relays</a>. (It isn't
 nearly as hard to set up as you might think, and can significantly
 <a href="http://wiki.noreply.org/noreply/TheOnionRouter/TorFAQ#ServerAnonymity";>
-enhance your own security against some attacks</a>.
+enhance your own security against some attacks</a>.)
 If running a relay isn't for you, we need
 <a href="<page volunteer>">help with many other aspects of the project</a>,
 and we need funds to <a